Embracing Humanness

Image Copyright © George Cannon, All Rights Reserved.

Image Copyright © George Cannon, All Rights Reserved.

Embracing Humanness 

i couldn’t,
[could not -]
kiss your past good-bye

was unable to mend,
or amend your heart,
too impotent to part your sky

i could not;
//incapable of//
lov(e)ing you anymore,
my spirit ran,
\\runs\\ deep,
infinitely within your pores

i can(no)’t give you light to live,
nor hope of laughter,
peace and bliss

i couldn’t
(can-not) wake you when you mourn,
burst your rainbow’s shattered storm,
or cause your earth to shake & quake,
to lift your eyelids to Star’s embrace

i ineffectively drank your tears –
too quickly, thirstily.
i open(ed) my palms to collect your gasps;
inadequately try(ied)
to fill your sighs with joy,
and erase/erode/your pains

{while, my own tears ran dry}

i am not your healing muse,
a majestic reason?
you are bemused –
i am of the simplest kind,
who loves in heartbeats and
questions why

i give out of brokenness,
my scars,
i’m bruised!
a quiet figure;
with nothing more to lose,
once, one is privy to see;
such hidden {simplistic} delicacies,
they hold tight to treasures
so many cannot\won’t\see
[ignored,battered emotionally]
all the forgotten –
the tattered you’s and
splintered me’s


I have been playing with words, grammar, punctuation, “tenses” and formatting. I am not really sure why other than I felt like the grammar rules were trying to conform me SO in an act of rebellion I defied them! I am quite silly today ergo my musings for the day.

In all seriousness, I am participating in dVerse Poets Pub OpenLinkNight today. Come join the us!

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Sharing the twistings, and musings that twirl in my mind. Hoping others can relate, or at least enjoy... To know more about me personally you can visit my website at Mind Retrofit.
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20 Responses to Embracing Humanness

  1. claudia says:

    ha smiles…i always like a bit of rebellion and the courage to try something new – i think it works well – i also think the emotions come across well – the tragedy of not being able to be what the other needs obviously – always difficult…

  2. brian miller says:

    i am of the simplest kind,
    who loves in heartbeats and
    questions why…i found and openness and honesty in those lines….as if saying this is me…this is us…

    ha…grammar rebellion is good for me too…

  3. Grace says:

    I find myself breaking the grammar rules and playing with format & word placement once in a while ~ Very creative post and my favorite part is this:

    i ineffectively drank your tears –
    too quickly, thirstily.

    • Thank you Grace!

      I love to break the rules when I find myself getting “obsessive” about them. It is fun to step out and play with formatting and grammar. A creative outlet that makes me feel in control and out-of-control at the same time. 🙂

  4. ..the sad but honest reality of the last five lines, just wonderful poetry to these ears.

    • Thank you! In these words, I found a certain healing that allowed me to accept that people cannot expect me to be their everything and that I cannot be their everything. It is sad, but a good feeling of letting go of faulty expectations. I am so glad you liked it!! 🙂

  5. Laurie Kolp says:

    I think the stretching of the rules reinforces your feelings… I love it!

  6. Great use of structure and punctuation. Very original.

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  8. MarinaSofia says:

    Experimentation and rebellion is always good. You’ve inspired me to try this out for myself some time!

  9. Beth Winter says:

    Oh, I feel sad. The sense of dismay with surrender when all efforts fail. This is incredibly well written, the stylized structure punctuating the messages.

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